I didn’t finish what I was saying. Anyway, my overall critique (if there ever was one) is that the talent needs to be more vocally expressive. You already go to the length of avoiding face shots (which is fine) so you are already “anonymous”. Therefore, be MORE EXPRESSIVE! SAY what you want and what you’re doing—what you want do to do, etc.,… in other words, let the dirty talk FLY!
(If you need/want any help/coaching, I’m an expert/actor/model, etc., myself, so feel free to reach out. (OBVIOUSLY, I’m not going to share my info and/or my girlfriend’s info—she’s also famous from the industry—here for the whole world to see; but, if you’re interested, you will figure out how to reach me. YOU HAVE GREAT POTENTIAL!